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Aug
18
Passing The Torch: A New Haiku Buckaroo
by Leslie
A winner has been chosen.
It was not easy.
haiku verses, but just one
Haiku Buckaroo
by the reigning champion
Mr. Mo-Coffee
along with thoughtful comments
from our champ and judge.
Haiku Buckaroo Honorable Mention
Today seems perfect
to revisit a story
about a haircut.
No, not that long one,
but there is another one
from another time.
I was in Japan
and at my fav’rite haunt,
the Mister Donut.
Free refill coffee
is pretty rare in Japan,
but MisDo has it.
And so I was there,
wondering why I’d gained weight,
blaming it on rice…
A guy came over,
asking me general stuff.
Where from? Use chopsticks?
(Sometimes randomly
people will approach you
to practice English.)
We chatted, and then
he asked me an odd question:
You need a haircut?
Not sure how he guess’d.
My hair prob’ly looked like crap.
Still, I was intrigued.
And I did need one.
See, language barriers
can be really hard.
Even in English,
I have trouble explaining
how I want my hair.
So I’d put it off
waiting for my Japanese
to become fluent.
Turns out that this guy
had a friend with a salon,
down alley, downstairs.
Ever so cautious
but I did follow him there,
and it went just fine.
And he translated,
explaining what I wanted,
the perfect haircut.
Even though I tried,
nobody would let me pay,
and so it was free.
Stuff like this happened
throughout my time in Japan,
so many stories.
But now to this day
when I think about donuts
I think haircuts, too.
Submitted by Maggie’s Mind
Mo-Coffee says: “I was impressed by so many entries that expanded the traditional haiku form into longer narrative poems. This one stood out simply because I found my mind returning to it for three days. The tone and voice is lovely. The story is simple and simply told. And I love the symmetry. Although it might be a touch long, there are two of my favorite haiku’s in this one poem:
No, not that long one,
but there is another one
from another time.
And…
(Sometimes randomly
people will approach you
to practice English.)
The latter one could stand alone, I think. (…and I love the intimacy created by the parenthesis).”
Haiku Buckaroo Honorable Mention
While you are sleeping
I watch your breath rise and fall
And I am content.
Submitted by Jenn in Holland
Mo-Coffee says: “Simple; captures a moment without being sentimental. Also I like that we are left unsure of the relationship and circumstances of the poem.”
Haiku Buckaroo Honorable Mention
Yellow bird sees me
singing at the end of day
perched on a high wire.
Submitted by Elaine at Blog In My Eye
Mo-Coffee says: “This one has a nice tricky ending that adds unexpected tension to the verse.”
Haiku Buckaroo Honorable Mention
Wish there was a word
for that slap-thuk-whoo-whoosh sound~
Boats on water
Submitted by Jenn in Holland
Mo-Coffee says: “Finally I have to give this one a mention. I’m a sucker for onomatopoeia!”
Here, honorable mentions.
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And now…
Poor summer garden
Awash in weeds and neglect
Sun dried tomatoes
Submitted by Englishgenie
Mo-Coffee says: “This one recalls some of the history of haiku (at least the way I understand it) in it’s relationship between humanity and nature, and in its witty turn of phrase at the end. That’s a lot to get into 17 syllables. Plus the word “awash,” which is wonderfully descriptive (awash in neglect…ponder that for a second…) and a great contrast to the now not-so juicy tomatoes.”
to Englishgenie! You won!
A Kit! A Mug! Cash!
display your button proudly
on your blog, winner!
and all the participants!
You’re phenomenal!
fourth Haiku Buckaroo game
begins now, my friends.
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This was so much fun! I’m thrilled at the honorable mention, and congrats to the other mentions and the winner, too. Very nicely done!
Thank you so much! I am honored to be chosen among such fierce competition.
Congratulations Englishgenie! That was one of my favorite haiku(s?) as well!
Well done to everyone! I just love this contest, and I really will be counting down to the next one. I think in between now and then I will have to get my haiku writing fix elsewhere. It’s sooooooo much fun!
Thank you Leslie, my Buck, for hosting and encouraging and well, just everything!
Thanks to Mo Coffee for all the hard work judging too. And, yeah, for picking me. That feels nice.
Brilliant verses. I’m so impressed with Maggie’s longer piece, and English Genie’s Buckaroo winner is elegant indeed!
wow…wow wow to the winners! those verses just flow out so smoothly, I am amazed. Congratulations to the winners!
Those are just so wonderful. I love Mo Coffee’s dedication in his decision-making. Great choice for buckaroo and HMs.
Those were fantastic! Wow. Congrats to the winners!